r/OCPoetry • u/Greedy_Entry2713 • 6d ago

Feedback Please Meters away , worlds apart

You are so close yet so far,

sometimes you feel just like a star.

I try to reach you but my hands are short —

what would I do with longer hands,

when you are only meters apart?

It is not the problem of my hands, but of my stars,

that every day I see you but we are worlds apart.

Is it only me who tortures himself this way,

or will you try to get closer to me someday?

https://www.reddit.com/r/OCPoetry/s/QyRqLEeDtv

https://www.reddit.com/r/OCPoetry/s/Q3VreyBVbx

11 Upvotes

83% Upvoted

16 comments sorted by

View all comments

1

u/WhatKadambarisees 1d ago

It's beautiful ✨I love the contrast between being only meters apart and feeling worlds away from someone. The line about your hands being too short, only to realise that the real distance lies in the stars, is especially poignant. It captures that helpless feeling of wanting to reach someone who is physically within reach but emotionally somewhere far beyond you. The ending makes it even more bittersweet, because beneath all that longing is one simple question: will you ever try to meet me halfway?