r/OCPoetry • u/Jollygiants42 • Sep 19 '26

Feedback Please Teenage Angst

I am a teenager

I remember every time I was called fat

I am a teenager

I am a punching bag for my “friends” so they’ll hang out with me

I am a teenager

I just want to be seen

I am a teenager

I am ugly

I am broken

I am a teenager

I’m 51

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u/underpant_pioneer 4d ago

The last line is a gut punch, I already know that you write some incredible plot twist from the last line alone. The poem is pretty typical when we omit the last line but after the last line it flips everything upside down. I really liked this poem

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u/Jollygiants42 3d ago

Thank u for ur kinds words. I was shooting for gut punch. I appreciate u taking the time to read it and respond.