[PI] Ochistka - FirstChapter - 2148 Words

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how does clerical marriage/ordaining married people work in this universe/religion? i was a little confused how he has a fiancée.

also, the biggest issue i had was that a magic book of 10,000,000 spells written by rasputin needs a much cooler name than "the book of magic" :)

"Nikita knew that it was inevitable for him not to go through with the task given."

is that "not" supposed to be in there? the transition from nikitia refusing to him accepting after less than a half page seems abrupt. maybe give him more carrot or stick for him to change his mind?

the post-cold war russia but with wizards does sound fascinating, though, i would def read more. is there a russian mafia or do the magic users take up that role? and you got to include chernobyl somehow if possible.

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