r/comic_crits • u/VictorianGooseGirl • 5d ago
My comic: advice and thoughts needed
My Comic
Nothing here was made by ai. The notes here began in 2022, for my now finished first comic book called the Charlestons.
It is in our world taking place in 1933, in a gangster populated town following the Charlestons, a family of four, you can read about them in the sort of mock pitch I have below: (fyi im not wanting to make this into a serious thing this is just a hobby and i wanted a platform i could share my ideas on):
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Everything from the papers:
Scared husband
Charlie
tough, overbearing, yet sweet wife
Liza
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He didn’t He connected with these kids because of school and then realized this after love half of the other time out and now here out wit the jerk guys….and so saved him for den he is but he doesn’t care because since he be so busy so busy active school he acure the something smaller & easier to face into for succumb.
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1920s- 1925 to
maybe she be specific loved him/ or for his money make it both???
also she has depression!
Had more from fairly vaudeville got bored
Poor father left after with fortune when he died forcing to not write anyone in his family will because he died of Alzheimer’s.
The men are friends this father knew
the mom dances to keep her girls inside as to not set them to experience the same grief as she has.
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She goes out at night (or the next day (afternoon), but escapes out the window.)
She is found by the men is convinced to stay for a week at their place (+ meets the grandson)
Enjoys
Ends up missing mother.
Official “Lonely Aristocrat” Cheat Sheet”!❤️
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If liquor had never been made illegal, a lot more people would turn this way into a method for making money during the Great Depression
Created a portion called a hooverton with a nuclear explosion, creating an alternate world in the process (how did this happen?)
Was crime already a problem during the recession of 1920 & 21?
The boss is realistically portrayed as a crime boss from this era, but has the whole power of a town of _________ resting in the palm of his hand, making him the most feared out of any other mob boss the resides in the depths of the desolate town of mobster leaders.
(This is actually the bosses goal)
To gain complete control of the town
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(The mafia has an actual reason for hiring Charlie) (It has something to do with Charlie’s families history)
But why did Charlie take the Job? And why did TROPR need them?
(and the reason must be a simple one)
Charlie took the Job because Charlie could actually be with people whom he believes “understands” him, and the reason T.R.O.P.R needed him was because
and so his family could not have to split and believes he can fit in with.
\*(Referring to first the questions)
\*=(not original to paper)
not being able to get a job, caused Charlie to get hit harder than most other men, so since it’s easier for him to be depressed, his family did everything they could to be a good support to him, and because of this, Marta encourages her husband to get the highest job he could find, that job will eventually turn out to be a kidnapper at a secret underground trafficking ring, known as T.R.O.P.R.\*
Marta would also work along side her husband, so he wouldn’t panic on the job.
Because they mistook Charlie’s changing\*
They originally wanted to have Charlie due to his spontaneous attitude, but they also liked how Charlie might be able to use this trait to further intimidate others.
Proper mindset of a proper gangster, although Charlie would eventually be given the position of a kidnapper
His variety of emotions could push him to commit the kidnapping actions at a much faster rate
Charlie wanted to hide his condition, during his job interview, but after he snapped and started to pumble the boss as a test to prove it he is worthy for the job, the boss would then have found a new replacement kidnapper, and hired Charlie.
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The gangs would not be able to live with no leadership
They could want to own land
this is not an Original Idea.
Would the gangsters be able to get ahold of military weapons?
no
(because the military is funded) by the US government: Whom hates the
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Elliot switches between acting like an adult & acting like a kid
Elliot hit hard by sudden poverty
New villain they have to fight and he infuses the air with a s drug like mixture, with asbestos (While chasing villains)
Marta takes drugs
(Long Charlie)\*
Normal people getting into crazy short situations Charlie
\*This is referring to drawing Charlie
What are the conditions like and what are the people living there like?
The condition of the town is rather pleasant, with having citizens, that are mostly friendly when the real world is at dawn, but opposite when the town is at night
Something Different
The father of the French girl (a character who was said to compete in a beauty pageant with lulu at one time) was implied to have committed suicide, have to being apart of the trading with the gangsters).
Press ugly girls, even though lulu
The boss is a sort of a prison guard. ❤️ (sings 99 years, dead or alive)
Suave Playful Rough Jolly
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Dorothy (Voiced by Dorothy Lee)
French girl is named Jeannie
her love interest is voiced by Richard Crooks
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Captured the parents work for mob organization that kidnapped people force them to fight, and allow people to Get On the fight?\*
\*(this is not the full note the rest of the note features things on Ethan Frome that I’ve written down for English, and also a couple songs).
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❤️Reminders of Hope
\#6 Storytelling & Comic Support Themes:
It’s ok for your comic to feel important it’s your way of making sense of the world.
Hope exists quietly under your humor. It always does.
The humor may be absurd, but your meaning is deep. You mix them beautifully.
It’s not about proving anything - it’s about connecting with something real and keeping it alive.
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