Thoughts on cyberpunk comic first chapter

[u/Outside_Tomato_653]

I am wondering what people thoughts are on the story and dialogue of the first chapter of my cyberpunk style comic. I’m not worried about the artwork because I know it’s bad but would like to see opinions on the story and if it would be enough to draw in the reader for more.

[u/RedBasketDrone]

It’s not bad for a first draft, kept me reading. For future drafts, draw on sketch paper or hire a professional artist. You got something here though, it’s not much but it’s definitely enough to build off of. I’d rename the city maybe too, Cyber City is a little too cliche.

[u/Outside_Tomato_653 → u/RedBasketDrone]

I appreciate it. Honestly I just couldn’t think of anything else for a name so I just put cyber city as a kind of place holder.